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My dream destination is the universe.
I want to see the Earth in space before I die.
It's time to travel space through a project called Space x.
Science and technology have made a lot of progress in such a short time.
Until now, only a few number of people can buy expensive space travel tickets, but soon there will be packages that can leave the Earth.
It has been expressed and recorded a lot in movies and videos, but I want to see it with my own eyes.
When I was young, my dream was to become an astronaut and a scientist.
I didn't achieve that dream, but I'm always sad.

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Hi Evan:) 

That is a great dream. I think once in our lives we have dreamed of being an astronaut. We would have always wanted to know what it's like up there. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

My dream destination is the universe.
>> CORRECT

I want to see the Earth in space before I die.
>> I want to see the Earth from space before I die.

It's time to travel space through a project called Space x.
>> It's time to travel space through a project called "Space X".

Science and technology have made a lot of progress in such a short time.
>>Science and technology have made a lot of progress in such short time.

Until now, only a few number of people can buy expensive space travel tickets, but soon there will be packages that can leave the Earth.
>> Until now, only a few people can buy expensive space travel tickets, but soon there will be packages that can let us leave Earth.

It has been expressed and recorded a lot in movies and videos, but I want to see it with my own eyes.
>> It has been expressed and recorded in a lot in movies and videos, but I want to see it with my own eyes.

When I was young, my dream was to become an astronaut and a scientist.
>> CORRECT

I didn't achieve that dream, but I'm always sad.
>> I didn't achieve that dream, so I'm always sad.

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