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What memory in your life would you want to forget and why?

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I don't want to forget any memories about me in my life.
Of course there are some memory that I want to forget, but I think all of my memories are important.
Also if I remeber all of my memories, I can share it with my friends if they talk about it.
So I don't want to forget any memories about me in my life.

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Hi John:) 

All memories in our life are important. They all serve their own purpose. It makes us who we are today. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise
I don't want to forget any memories about me in my life.
>> I don't want to forget any memories in my life.

Of course there are some memory that I want to forget, but I think all of my memories are important.
>> Of course, there are some memories that I want to forget, but I think that all of those are still important. 

Also if I remeber all of my memories, I can share it with my friends if they talk about it.
>>Also, if I remember all of my memories, I can share it with my friends when we talk. 

So I don't want to forget any memories about me in my life.
>> So, I don't want to forget any memories in my life. 
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