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Dear Don,

Climate change is very serious situation. I heard that Russia made a high temperature 31.4 degree this year. this temperature was a highest since 1892. normally, Russia, in case of summer, their temperature go up over 30 degree. but in Jun, normally, under 30, 25 degree. but this year, it went up over 31 degree. so in Siberia, it happened mountain fire a lot. so it made a lot of pollute materials.
As you know, there is no fire station in Siberia, so in case of mountain fire in there, it was very serious problem.
Now, North area, old ice is melting, so ocean level is getting up, so a lot of place will be sink by sea water. because of that, it will make a strong wave and overflow.

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Hi Andrew!

Happy Wednesday. See you later ^^

T. DON

Dear Don,

Climate change is very serious situation.
>> CORRECT

I heard that Russia made a high temperature 31.4 degree this year. this temperature was a highest since 1892. normally, Russia, in case of summer, their temperature go up over 30 degree. but in Jun, normally, under 30, 25 degree. but this year, it went up over 31 degree.
>> I heard that Russia made a high temperature at 31.4 degree this year. This temperature was the highest since 1892. Normally, in Russia, during summer, their temperature go up over 30 degrees but in June, normally it is under 30, around 25 degrees. But this year, it went up over 31 degrees.

so in Siberia, it happened mountain fire a lot. so it made a lot of pollute materials.
>> So in Siberia, mountain fires happened a lot so it produces pollution.

As you know, there is no fire station in Siberia, so in case of mountain fire in there, it was very serious problem.
>> As you know, there is no fire station in Siberia, so in case of a mountain fire, it will become a very serious problem.

Now, North area, old ice is melting, so ocean level is getting up, so a lot of place will be sink by sea water. because of that, it will make a strong wave and overflow.
>> Now, in Northern area, an old ice is melting, so the ocean's level is getting high and a lot of place will sink with sea water. Because of that, it can produce a powerful wave and water overflow.
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