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What do you think will happen if North Korea and South Korea are as one again?

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If North Korea and South Korea are as one again, I will feel happy. Because I always wanted to meet North Korea's students. And, North Koreans and South Koreans can communicate each other without learning new languages. And, I can visit Baekdusan Mountain. I have heard many interesting informations about Baekdusan Mountain. So, I want to see Baekdusan Mountain in person. Also, I can learn new city's dialect. But if North Korea and South Korea are as one again, clearly, it will be confusing. So, I'm scared. But, I hope that North Korea and South Korea are as one again.

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Hi Kimberly:) 

Congrats on answering your first homework! You did great. 

I also hope that North Korea and South Korea would unite as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise


If North Korea and South Korea are as one again, I will feel happy. 
>> CORRECT

Because I always wanted to meet North Korea's students. 
>> It is because I have always wanted to meet North Korean students. 

And, North Koreans and South Koreans can communicate each other without learning new languages. 
>> North Koreans and South Koreans can communicate with each other without learning other languages. 

And, I can visit Baekdusan Mountain. 
>> I can also visit the  Baekdusan Mountain. 

I have heard many interesting informations about Baekdusan Mountain. 
>> I have heard many interesting information about the Baekdusan Mountain. 

So, I want to see Baekdusan Mountain in person. 
>> So, I want to see the Baekdusan Mountain in person. 

Also, I can learn new city's dialect. 
>> Also, I can learn new city dialects. 

But if North Korea and South Korea are as one again, clearly, it will be confusing. 
>> But if North Korea and South Korea are as one again, clearly, it will be confusing which makes me scared. 

So, I'm scared. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

But, I hope that North Korea and South Korea are as one again
>> CORRECT
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