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Why is doing volunteer work important?

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Although a government tries to give services to all people, all people can't take the services. I used to join a volunteer club. When I was a member of the volunteer club, I taught mathematics to students of a countryside elementary school. They had no places to spend time, until their parent come back home. Doing volunteer is also good for volunteer workers. Volunteer workers can feel as like that the world needs you.

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Good evening Hwanny!
Thank you for sharing your valuable opinion regarding this matter. 
I agree that volunteer work is beneficial to the community. 
Through volunteering, we see the value of empathy and charity. 
Anyhow, I hope you're having a great evening. See you in class later. :)

~Teacher Charry

Although a government tries to give services to all people, all people can't take the services. 
>> Although the government tries to give services to all people, not all can receive the services.
I used to join a volunteer club. 
>> CORRECT!
When I was a member of the volunteer club, I taught mathematics to students of a countryside elementary school. 
>> When I was a member of the volunteer club, I taught mathematics to elementary school students in the countryside. 
They had no places to spend time, until their parent come back home. 
>> They had no place to spend their time and only waited until their parents came back home.
Doing volunteer is also good for volunteer workers. 
>> Doing volunteer work is also good for volunteer workers.
Volunteer workers can feel as like that the world needs you.
>> Volunteer workers can feel as though the world needs them.
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