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North Korea and South Korea is still war.
Just having rest time.
If North Korea and South Korea belong together, the first thing government need to solve is a separate family live together again.
When I was a student, teacher show us to the movie title is at class.
I saw a movie's one scene is a separate family meeting scene.
It's feel like so cruel, and just sad.
It's ridiculous to say goodbye to family.
And if our country getting together, I think we should resolve that problem first.

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Hi Ann:) 

I also hope that North Korea and South Korea would unite as well. Although, I think there would also be disadvantages to this. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

North Korea and South Korea is still war.
>> North Korea and South Korea are still at war. 

Just having rest time.
>> They are just on rest. 

If North Korea and South Korea belong together, the first thing government need to solve is a separate family live together again.
>> If the two countries will unite, the first thing that the government should do is to reunite separated families. 

When I was a student, teacher show us to the movie title is <±¹Á¦½ÃÀå> at class.
>> When I was a student, teacher showed us a movie called "±¹Á¦½ÃÀå" 

I saw a movie's one scene is a separate family meeting scene.
>> One scene in the movie involved separating a family. 

It's feel like so cruel, and just sad.
>> It was so cruel and sad. 

It's ridiculous to say goodbye to family.
>> It's ridiculous to say goodbye to your family.

And if our country getting together, I think we should resolve that problem first.
>> And if our country reunites again, I think we should resolve that problem first.

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