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We should fix our personalities

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Each personalities, there are pros and cons, either. For example, in the case of my personality, I'm good at debate, however it can be cons because someone hate me since I don't agree with something easily. In the case of my mom, pros is good at yielding. But my mom is not good at deciding. Like it, each personalities have disadvantages. So we should try to change this cons into pros. Though it's very hard, but we have to try to fix these cons because it can be obstacle when we become adult and go to company or live in society. Therefore, I think we have to try to make our personalities better to live in society well.
Diary;
Today, I was not good at speaking. So I made plan to improve speaking skill. I will practice speaking by speak with my imaginary friends in diverse situations. I think I can improve my speaking skill by doing it and in the English class, then I can speak without stuttering.

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Each personalities, there are pros and cons, either. 
>> Each personality has pros and cons.

For example, in the case of my personality, I'm good at debate, however it can be cons because someone hate me since I don't agree with something easily.
>> For example, in my case, I'm good at debate. However, it can be a disadvantage because someone may hate me since I don't agree with something easily.

In the case of my mom, pros is good at yielding.
>> In my mom's case, she's yielding.

But my mom is not good at deciding. 
>> However, she is not good at decision-making.

Like it, each personalities have disadvantages. 
>> Each personality has disadvantages. 

So we should try to change this cons into pros. 
>> Therefore, we should try to turn these disadvantages into advantages.

Though it's very hard, but we have to try to fix these cons because it can be obstacle when we become adult and go to company or live in society. 
>> Though it's very hard, we have to try to fix these because they can be obstacles when we become adults and go to companies or live in society. 

Therefore, I think we have to try to make our personalities better to live in society well.
>> This is a good sentence.

Diary:
Today, I was not good at speaking. 
>> This is a good sentence.

So I made plan to improve speaking skill. 
>> Therefore, I made a plan to improve my speaking skills.

I will practice speaking by speak with my imaginary friends in diverse situations.
>> I will practice by speaking with my imaginary friends in diverse situations.

 I think I can improve my speaking skill by doing it and in the English class, then I can speak without stuttering.
>> I think I can improve my speaking skills by doing it, so that I can speak during my English class without stuttering.

Hello, Daniel! You weren't stuttering much tonight.  However, It's good that you know what your weakness is and what you can do to improve.  Fighting!

- Teacher Debbie
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