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This christmas, I haven a date.
A long time I don't have a boyfriend, but now I'm dating with some men.
It's to very interested know about other person.
He's personality is kind and I'm excited because Christmas!!
Christmas date is so romantic.
This christmas it was very special memory to me

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Hi Ann:) 

I hope that relationship of you two would last a lot of Christmas. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

This christmas, I haven a date.
>>This Christmas, I have a date.

A long time I don't have a boyfriend, but now I'm dating with some men.
>> I haven't had a boyfriend for a long time, but now I have one. 

It's to very interested know about other person.
>> I am very interested in knowing that person. 

He's personality is kind and I'm excited because Christmas!!
>> He is kind. I am excited because it's Christmas. 

Christmas date is so romantic.
>> Christmas dates are so romantic.

This christmas it was very special memory to me
>> This Christmas has a very special memory for me. 
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