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One the other hand, the domination of information technology has had some negative impacts on our daily lives. People can perform various tasks by just some simple clicks on the computer. However, it is leading to the problem of people being obsessed with the virtual world and starting to lose interactions in real life. The technology advances also make people become lazier, therefore, affect their levels of health. On the other hand, the development of computer science has made a lot of positive changes to our daily lives. In home activities, technology allows people to do their housework in a more convenient and efficient way. Housewives no longer need to go to the supermarket to buy groceries and food, instead they can order at home through

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It is true that development of information technology is affecting various aspects of our lives and playing an important roles in our daily activities, although, it has own draw backs, I think its benefits are far more than negative effects.
>>> It is true that the development of information technology is affecting various aspects of our lives and playing an important roles in our daily activities. Although, it has own draw backs, I think its benefits are far more than negative effects.
One the other hand, the domination of information technology has had some negative impacts on our daily lives. 
>>> CORRECT
People can perform various tasks by just some simple clicks on the computer. 
>>> People can perform various tasks through simple clicks on the computer. 
However, it is leading to the problem of people being obsessed with the virtual world and starting to lose interactions in real life. 
>>> CORRECT
The technology advances also make people become lazier, therefore, affect their levels of health. 
>>> The technology advances also make people become lazier, therefore, it affects their level of health. 
On the other hand, the development of computer science has made a lot of positive changes to our daily lives.
>>> CORRECT
 In home activities, technology allows people to do their housework in a more convenient and efficient way.
>>> CORRECT
 Housewives no longer need to go to the supermarket to buy groceries and food, instead they can order at home through
online.
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