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The Impact of Fishing Industry

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Avove 50% of marine plastic is abandoned net. Fishes and Whales are dissappearing due to overfishing. Coral reefs are dying, not just because of global warming and ocean acidification, but mainly by lack of food which is coming from fishes.
These are the information from the documentary 'Seaspiracy'. I think fishing is causing considerable problems, and i really should reduce seafood for more than 90%.

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Avove 50% of marine plastic is abandoned net. 

>> Above 50% of marine plastics are abandoned nets. 

Fishes and Whales are dissappearing due to overfishing.

 >> Fishes and whales are disappearing due to overfishing

Coral reefs are dying, not just because of global warming and ocean acidification, but mainly by lack of food which is coming from fishes.

>> Coral reefs are dying, not just because of global warming and ocean acidification, but mainly, by lack of food which comes from fishes.
These are the information from the documentary 'Seaspiracy'. 

>> These are the information from the documentary, 'Seaspiracy'. 

I think fishing is causing considerable problems, and i really should reduce seafood for more than 90%.

>> I think fishing is causing considerable amount of problems, and it really should be reduced for more than 90%.

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