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Do we have to support strong friends?

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Do we have to support strong friends?
There are lots of strong friends around us. Then, do we have to obey them or support them. According to lots of teachers and textbooks, they said we don't have to do it. However, in my opinion, we need to support them more than other people. It doesn't mean that obey to them. It means we have to have distance but we must not treat them too bad person or have too many distances. In conclusion, we have to treat them as 'just friend'.

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Hi, Daniel! Thank you for the effort. You were able to write good sentences. However, you were not able to answer the question correctly. 

- Teacher Debbie

Do we have to support strong friends?
>> This is a good sentence.

There are lots of strong friends around us. 
>> This is a good sentence.

Then, do we have to obey them or support them. 
>> However, do we have to follow them or support them?

According to lots of teachers and textbooks, they said we don't have to do it. 
>> According to lots of teachers and textbooks, we don't have to.

However, in my opinion, we need to support them more than other people. 
>> However, in my opinion, we need to support them more than the other people. 

It doesn't mean that obey to them.
>> It doesn't mean we have to follow them.

It means we have to have distance but we must not treat them too bad person or have too many distances.
>>  It means we have to distance ourselves from them, but we must not treat them as bad people.

In conclusion, we have to treat them as 'just friend'.
>> In conclusion, we have to treat them as friends.
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