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Do you think that Christmas should be an important holiday in South Korea? Why or why not?

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No, I don't. As a korean, I think Hangul Proclamation Day is the most important holiday. Because if it didn't be made, clearly, we wouldn't be able to do anything. For example, we wouldn't be able to make laws, communicate each and celebrate an anniversary. So, I think we wouldn't be able to enjoy Christmas. And we would not be able to communicate. Everything is based on Korean. So, I think Christmas should not be an important.

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Hi Kimberly:) 

Hangul is a very important thing in your culture indeed. :) It's what makes South Korea go around basically. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

No, I don't.
>> CORRECT

As a korean, I think Hangul Proclamation Day is the most important holiday. 
>> As a Korean, I think Hangul Proclamation Day is the most important holiday. 

Because if it didn't be made, clearly, we wouldn't be able to do anything. 
>> Because if it wasn't made, clearly, we wouldn't be able to do anything. 

For example, we wouldn't be able to make laws, communicate each and celebrate an anniversary. 
>> For example, we wouldn't be able to make laws, communicate each and celebrate anniversaries. 

So, I think we wouldn't be able to enjoy Christmas. 
>> CORRECT

And we would not be able to communicate. 
>> CORRECT

Everything is based on Korean. 
>> CORRECT

So, I think Christmas should not be an important.
>> So, I think Christmas should not be an important holiday. 

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