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A memory that I want to forget.

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I don't have any memories in my life that I want to forget.
I think I'm going to find myself now because of these previous experiences or feelings because I want to remember all the good things and sad things.
Even though men say they want to forget their memories in the military, I think even those hard memories are memories.
Perhaps when I remember my elementary school days, there was a moment when I was embarrassed because I couldn't sing during the song presentation time, and that short moment is a memory I want to forget.

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Hi Evan:) 

Memories are memories. We can't really erase them but they are the ones that built the person we are today. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't have any memories in my life that I want to forget.
>> CORRECT

I think I'm going to find myself now because of these previous experiences or feelings because I want to remember all the good things and sad things.
>> I think I'm going to find myself now because of these previous experiences or feelings. I want to remember all the good and bad things in my past. 

Even though men say they want to forget their memories in the military, I think even those hard memories are memories.
>> Even though men say they want to forget their memories in the military, I think even those are still good memories. 

Perhaps when I remember my elementary school days, there was a moment when I was embarrassed because I couldn't sing during the song presentation time, and that short moment is a memory I want to forget.
>>Although I remember that in my elementary school days, there was a moment when I was embarrassed because I couldn't sing during the song presentation time. That short moment is a memory that I would want to forget. 
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