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If I had studied so far, I would have studied real estate. So, I would have obtained a related certificate and worked as a certified real estate agent to help with many housing find people.
Housing prices in Korea have more than doubled or tripled over the years, mainly in Seoul, due to various factors.
If I had studied in advance and knew the flow of the real estate market in advance, I would have been able to make a lot of profit by purchasing land or houses.
In Korea, especially in Seoul, the price of apartments has risen so much that if I had come from my hometown to Seoul recently, I would not have been able to buy a house.
I think it's late now, but I think it's an opportunity to raise money to always study and watch the real estate market with interest.
We can't do anything in the future with our salary only.

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Hi Evan:) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I had studied so far, I would have studied real estate. 
>> If I studied hard, I would have taken real state. 

So, I would have obtained a related certificate and worked as a certified real estate agent to help with many housing find people.
>> So, I would have obtained a certificate related to it and worked as a certified real estate agent to help people looking for houses. 

Housing prices in Korea have more than doubled or tripled over the years, mainly in Seoul, due to various factors.
>> Housing prices in Korea have increased over the years, mainly in Seoul due to various factors.

If I had studied in advance and knew the flow of the real estate market in advance, I would have been able to make a lot of profit by purchasing land or houses.
>> If I had studied in advance and knew the flow of the real estate market , I would have been able to make a lot of profit by purchasing land or houses.

In Korea, especially in Seoul, the price of apartments has risen so much that if I had come from my hometown to Seoul recently, I would not have been able to buy a house.
>> In Korea, especially in Seoul, the prices of apartments have risen so much that if I had come from my hometown to Seoul recently, I would not have been able to buy a house.

I think it's late now, but I think it's an opportunity to raise money to always study and watch the real estate market with interest.
>> I think it's already late now but there is still an opportunity to raise money to study and watch the flow of the real estate markets with interests. 

We can't do anything in the future with our salary only.
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