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In my opinion studying abroad is good for me. I can improve my English skill easier. I have to use only English, no Korean. Especially, I can speak English very well after I studying abroad. However, my math skill will be decrease because I can't study math like in Korea. In Korea, students have to study especially math hardest. I don't know why, but students have to study math hard. That's why Korean are good at math. So, I lose the chance to study math in very competitive environment. Take example of my brother. When he went to Indonesia, his nickname was 'Genius of math'. It says how Korea educate in very competitive environment. But if there is chance to go to abroad, I will go. I can study math anywhere, but it is very good chance to improve my English skill a lot.

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Hi, Daniel! Awesome job! You were able to make longer sentences, and most of them were organized. Keep it up!

-  Teacher Debbie

In my opinion studying abroad is good for me.
>> In my opinion, studying abroad will be good for me.

I can improve my English skill easier. I have to use only English, no Korean.
>> I can improve my English skills easier because I only have to use English.

Especially, I can speak English very well after I studying abroad.
>> I will be able to speak English fluently after studying abroad.

However, my math skill will be decrease because I can't study math like in Korea. 
>> However, my math skill will get rusty because I can't study math the way we do in Korea. 

In Korea, students have to study especially math hardest. 
>> In Korea, math is the hardest subject for students.

I don't know why, but students have to study math hard. 
>> This is a good sentence.

That's why Korean are good at math.
>> This is the reason Koreans are good at it.

So, I lose the chance to study math in very competitive environment. 
>> If I study abroad, I may lose the chance to study math in a very competitive environment.

Take example of my brother. 
>> Take my brother, for example.

When he went to Indonesia, his nickname was 'Genius of math'. 
>> When he was in Indonesia, his nickname was "Math Genius."

It says how Korea educate in very competitive environment. 
>> It showed that Koreans are educated in a very competitive environment.

But if there is chance to go to abroad, I will go.
>> However, if there is a chance to go abroad, I will go.

 I can study math anywhere, but it is very good chance to improve my English skill a lot
>>  I can study math anywhere, and studying abroad will be a very good chance to improve my English skill a lot.
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