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My comfort food is shabu shabu.
My favorite too.
It's main of vegetable and when I eat the shabu shabu my stomach feel so comfortable.
I eat so much that I don't feel bad even if I'm full.
Because it's very mild and warm food.

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Hi Ann:) 

I love shabu-shabu too! It's one of my favorite dishes as well. We usually eat it every December. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My comfort food is shabu shabu.
>> CORRECT

My favorite too.
>> It is my favorite too. 

It's main of vegetable and when I eat the shabu shabu my stomach feel so comfortable.
>>> It's mainly vegetables and when I eat it, my stomach feels very soothed. 

I eat so much that I don't feel bad even if I'm full.
>> CORRECT

Because it's very mild and warm food.
>> It is because it is very mild and warm.
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