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To be honest, it is hard for me to define my characteristic whether it is outgoing or not. It means that My characteristic changes according to the various situation.

For example, when it comes to meeting people in my cycling club, I love meeting new people. Because I have a lot of things to talk to new people about. And also I will try to come closer to them to talk about our common interests first. And moreover, I will be able to be even talkative.

But as for a bit strict situation such as something like work and job, it's totally opposite. I don¡¯t like meeting new people and so I never approach them first. This is because I know those relationships can not be so long. And in a hard and heavy atmosphere, there is not much to talk about, so I have a tendency to be a bit taciturn in this formal atmosphere.

But as I'm here in Canada, I will need to fix my characteristic to be more outstanding. Even though It's not easy cause I'm not still young, I believe practice makes perfect.

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Here's your edited composition, Elvis!
I appreciate your sending it. Regarding my schedule, I know you can't find an available slot. Hope to speak to you again next time.

Cheers,
Jean~~




To be honest, it is hard for me to define my characteristic whether it is outgoing or not. 
>> or: In all honesty, it's hard to say whether I'm sociable or not.

It means that My characteristic changes according to the various situation.
>> It means that my characteristic changes according to various situation.
>> or: I supposed it truly depends on the occasion and situation I find myself in. 

For example, when it comes to meeting people in my cycling club, I love meeting new people. Because I have a lot of things to talk to new people about. 
>> For example, when it comes to meeting individuals in my cycling club, I love getting to know new people because I have a lot of things to talk about with them. 

And also I will try to come closer to them to talk about our common interests first. And moreover, I will be able to be even talkative.
>> And also I try to be closer to them to talk about our common interests first. Moreover, I can be even talkative or conversational.

But as for a bit strict situation such as something like work and job, it's totally opposite. This is because I know those relationships can not be so long.
>> But as for situations that have strict requirements such as work or job, I don¡¯t like meeting new people and so I never take the initiative to approach them since I know that these relationships can't last long.

 And in a hard and heavy atmosphere, there is not much to talk about, so I have a tendency to be a bit taciturn in this formal atmosphere.
>>  And in official or formal settings with a heavy atmosphere, there is not much to talk about, so I have a tendency to be a bit taciturn.

But as I'm here in Canada, I will need to fix my characteristic to be more outstanding.
>> correct

 Even though It's not easy cause I'm not still young, I believe practice makes perfect.
>> It may not be easy cause I'm not young anymore, I believe practice makes perfect.

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