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-What are the beautiful places that you have visited in Korea? Explain your answer in as much detail as you can.

IHave you ever been to Busan in Korea? It is a big city. Long time ago. I visited in there. If you go there, you could feel a unique mood in the town through the people and views. Especialy, I like the beach of Haewoundae. Alough there are sevral beaches in there, It has a conbination between a downtown feel and a countryside. It has surly beautiful big beach and clean water.

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Hey Rachel!

I really admire your hard work. And I feel glad that you take the time to read and answer the homework that I give.
I promise that your persistence will pay off soon.

Keep it up!
-Teacher Violet

Have you ever been to Busan in Korea? 
>> CORRECT!

It is a big city.
>> CORRECT!

Long time ago. I visited in there.
>> A long time ago, I visited there.

If you go there, you could feel a unique mood in the town through the people and views. 
>> CORRECT!

Especialy, I like the beach of Haewoundae. 
>> I especially like the beach of Haewoundae.

Alough there are sevral beaches in there, It has a conbination between a downtown feel and a countryside. 
>> Although there are several beaches there, it has a combination of downtown and countryside feel.

It has surly beautiful big beach and clean water.
>> It surely has a beautiful, big beach and clean water.
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