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Why do you think people started living in cities?

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There is a saying, you should live in a city when you are old. It means that, there are marts, hospitals, and places for spending free time. thous places will help you for your satisfied life. The government can spend lots of budget at a city, because there are many citizens. If the government spend budget, many citizens can benefit. After developing a city, the government will spend budget for countryside. A city has more job opportunity than countryside.

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Good evening Hwanny! :)
Thank you for writing this essay. It was nice to see the comparison. 
I agree that living in the city is very convenient. However, you have to have enough money to live in the city especially after retirement because living in the city is quite expensive. 
Anyhow, I hope you're having a wonderful night. 
See you again on Wednesday. ^_^
~Teacher Charry

There is a saying, you should live in a city when you are old.
>> There is a saying that you should live in a city when you are old.
It means that, there are marts, hospitals, and places for spending free time. 
>> It means that, there are marts, hospitals, and places to spend one's free time.
thous places will help you for your satisfied life. 
>> These places will help you live a satisfied life. 
The government can spend lots of budget at a city, because there are many citizens. 
>> The government needs to put lots of budget in a city because there are many citizens living there. 
If the government spend budget, many citizens can benefit. 
>> If the government will spend a big budget for those, many citizens can benefit. 
After developing a city, the government will spend budget for countryside. 
>> After developing a city, the government will set aside a budget for the countryside.
A city has more job opportunity than countryside.
>> A city has more job opportunities than the countryside.
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