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I'm broke up with my boyfriend.
I don't want to feel lonely that's why I make a boyfirend suddenly.
And suddenly broke up with him.
These day I keep thinking about my ex-boyfriend.
When I meet the ex-boyfriend, we were a lot of anniversaries together.
Honestly just now my truly mind, I want with my ex-boyfriend at my birthday.
Not sad, but it's little bit of wierd feeling these day.
I miss that day.

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Hi Ann:) 

I feel sad for you. It's okay. Maybe you guys were not meant to be together. There will always be a perfect person for us. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I'm broke up with my boyfriend.
>> I broke up with my boyfriend. 

I don't want to feel lonely that's why I make a boyfirend suddenly.
>> I didn't want to be lonely so I decided to have a boyfriend. 

And suddenly broke up with him.
>> Although, I suddenly broke up with him. 

These day I keep thinking about my ex-boyfriend.
>> These days, I keep thinking about my ex-boyfriend.

When I meet the ex-boyfriend, we were a lot of anniversaries together.
>> When I was  still with my ex-boyfriend, we had a lot of anniversaries together. 

Honestly just now my truly mind, I want with my ex-boyfriend at my birthday.
>> Honestly, I want to be with my ex-boyfriend on my birthday. 

Not sad, but it's little bit of wierd feeling these day.
>> I am not sad but I feel weird these days. 

I miss that day.
>> I miss those days with him. 
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