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I used to be advised that it is important to know what I like when I was finding a job. Adults tends to select a job that bring us more money rather than what we would like to do. However, it is almost impossible to find things what people like while they are growing up. In addintion, it is difficult to keep their interests once they have decided their job. It is true that jobs are totally diffrent with hobbys. Although, people like doing something a lot, it would be sick and tired, if it became their job. Most students in my country tend to decide their major according to the scores on the enterance exam because they don't know what they like before getting a job. People know that if their job fits on them after getting experience on real field. So, I would like to recommend people to get experiences on various field after that they'd better chooing their jobs. Parents have to encourage children to do anything they are interested in. If so, many people can manage their life very wel

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Hi there Mr. Hwang! ^^ I'm gonna be missing you a lot. huhuhu Keep on your studying and see improvements you'll do this year. Be happy about little things! Take care and have grateful days! See you next time!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I used to be advised that it is important to know what I like when I was finding a job.
>>> I used to get an advised that it is important to know what I like when I was finding a job.
 Adults tends to select a job that bring us more money rather than what we would like to do.
>>> Adult tends to choose a job that brings us much money rather than what our ineterests. 
 However, it is almost impossible to find things that people like while they are growing up.
>>> CORRECT
 In addition, it is difficult to keep their interests once they have decided their job.
>>> CORRECT
It is true that jobs are totally diffrent with hobbys. 
>>> It is true that jobs are totally different with hobbies
Although, people like doing something a lot, it would be sick and tired, if it became their job. 
>>> CORRECT
Most students in my country tend to decide their major according to the scores from their entrance exam because they don't know what they like before getting a job.
>>> CORRECT
 People know that if their job fits on them after getting experience on real field.
>>> CORRECT
 So, I would like to recommend people to get experiences on various field after that they'd better chooing their jobs.
>>>  So, I would like to recommend people to get experiences on various field after that they'd better choose their jobs.
 Parents have to encourage children to do anything they are interested in. 
>>>  Parents have to encourage their children to do things they are interested in.
If so, many people can manage their life very well.
>>> CORRECT
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