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Why I don\'t want to get outside with barefoot

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I don't want to go to outside with barefoot.
That is because outside is very dangerous to barefoot.
My second reason is theb outside is too cold or too hot to barefoot.
My third reason is the outside is very dirty.
Finally, also all people are wearing shoe when they get outside.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you for doing your homework. You were able to answer the question correction. Superb! 

Please take note of the corrections. 

- Teacher Debbie

I don't want to go to outside with barefoot.
>> I don't want to go outside barefoot.

That is because outside is very dangerous to barefoot.
>> That is because it is very dangerous.

My second reason is theb outside is too cold or too hot to barefoot.
>> It can be too cold or too hot to walk barefoot.

My third reason is the outside is very dirty.
>> In addition, it is very dirty.

Finally, also all people are wearing shoe when they get outside.
>> Finally, I don't want to go outside barefoot because all people wear shoes when they go out.
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