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What do you usually wish for during your birthday?

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Actually, I don't wish anything during my birthday.
But I have to, I will wish something about me.
Because If it is Christmas or other big holiday, I will wish something for my family and friends, but it is my birthday so I wanna wish something about me.
And also if there are big events or very sad events, I will wish about them.

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Hi John:) 

Wishing has already been a tradition whenever it's someone's birthday. It's actually fun. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Actually, I don't wish anything during my birthday.
>> Actually, I don't wish for anything on my birthday.

But I have to, I will wish something about me.
>> But if I have to, I will wish for something for myself. 

Because If it is Christmas or other big holiday, I will wish something for my family and friends, but it is my birthday so I wanna wish something about me.
>> If it's an important holiday, I usually with something for my family and friends. But since it's my birthday, I will wish something for myself. 

And also if there are big events or very sad events, I will wish about them
>> Also, if there were big or sad events, I will wish something regarding those. 

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