¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What do you usually wish for during your birthday?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ·ù*ÁÖ
2022-01-03 373

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Actually, I don't wish anything during my birthday.
But I have to, I will wish something about me.
Because If it is Christmas or other big holiday, I will wish something for my family and friends, but it is my birthday so I wanna wish something about me.
And also if there are big events or very sad events, I will wish about them.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi John:) 

Wishing has already been a tradition whenever it's someone's birthday. It's actually fun. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Actually, I don't wish anything during my birthday.
>> Actually, I don't wish for anything on my birthday.

But I have to, I will wish something about me.
>> But if I have to, I will wish for something for myself. 

Because If it is Christmas or other big holiday, I will wish something for my family and friends, but it is my birthday so I wanna wish something about me.
>> If it's an important holiday, I usually with something for my family and friends. But since it's my birthday, I will wish something for myself. 

And also if there are big events or very sad events, I will wish about them
>> Also, if there were big or sad events, I will wish something regarding those. 

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
116570 What is your favorite quote or saying? Why? ¾ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 1
116569 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 2
116568 If you were given the chance to be an animal, which animal would... ¹Ú*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 512
116567 Social media is good at human communication. ±è*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 612
116566 Have you ever been intimidated by someone¡¯s appearance? What... ±è*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 1
116565 homework ¾ç*ÀÎ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 906
116564 What is a newspaper¡¯s front page? / What¡¯s the headline today? ÁÖ*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 930
116563 Writing Exercise: Can you tell me how often you go to a beauty... Àü*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 1049
116562 Do you prefer tourism package tours or do you prefer to plan... ÁÖ*¼® ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 1
116561 If you were a song, what song would you be and why? ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 860
116560 22-02-16 Homework ¹Ú*·É ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 487
116559 02.18 homework ÀÓ*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 2
116558 Homework ÀÌ*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 690
116557 If you won the lottery, would you still pursue your profession... ÀÌ*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 5
116556 homework Á¤*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 436
116555 What can you say about where your parents work? ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 723
116554 2022.2.17 Àü* ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 804
116553 2022.2.16 Àü* ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 623
116552 What were your worse experience of rejection and best experience... ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 504
116551 homework ±è* ¿Ï·á 2022-02-18 677

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04