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What do you usually wish for during your birthday?

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What do you usually wish for during your birthday?

When I was young, I wished to take a gift from partners and friends.
I used to hang out late with my friends on my birthday.
Now, I wish to spend my birthday with my family.
I would like to have dinner and celebrate my birthday party

Belated Happy Birthday, Elise Teacher !!

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Hi Monica:) 

Thank you so much for the warm greeting! <3 It made me smile. Yes, celebrating our birthdays with our family is truly the best. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

When I was young, I wished to take a gift from partners and friends.
>> When I was young, I wished for presents from my partner and friends. 

I used to hang out late with my friends on my birthday.
>> CORRECT

Now, I wish to spend my birthday with my family.
>> CORRECT

I would like to have dinner and celebrate my birthday party
>> I would like to have dinner and celebrate my birthday party with them. 

Belated Happy Birthday, Elise Teacher !!
>> Belated Happy Birthday, Teacher Elise!

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