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What¡¯s your New Year¡¯s Resolution?

My New Year¡¯s Resolution is sending my mind to God every morning. When I see me back last year, I only thought my life. My work, my studying.... But nowaday I am praying for my neighbor and my country using YouTube. So I feel recovering. And whenever I am study or working , I can get afford. My Lord gives me new energy.
And Thesedays, it is not good for my work. Nobody wants to work this company. Besides one of my coworkers get sick. I feel getting worse. But I want to keep the company I am working with my coworkers. I will try to teach students with another subjects. Who said about turning a crisis into an opportunity!

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Hello Miss Rachel!

Thank you for sharing about your New Year's Resolution! It seems like you are having a lot of challenges recently, I hope you can hold on.

Stay strong!
-Teacher Violet

My New Year¡¯s Resolution is sending my mind to God every morning. 
>> My new year's resolution is sending my mind to God every morning (capitalization)

When I see me back last year, I only thought my life. 
>> When I think about myself last year, I only thought about my life.
OR >> When I look back at myself last year, I only thought about my life.

My work, my studying.... But nowaday I am praying for my neighbor and my country using YouTube. 
>> My work, my studies... but nowadays, I am praying for my neighbor and my country using / through YouTube.

So I feel recovering. 
>> So I feel like I'm recovering.

And whenever I am study or working , I can get afford. 
>> (Do you mean) And I can afford to study and work.

My Lord gives me new energy.
>> CORRECT!

And Thesedays, it is not good for my work. 
>> And these days, my work is not doing well.

Nobody wants to work this company. 
>> Nobody wants to work in this/our company.

Besides one of my coworkers get sick. 
>> Besides, one of my co-workers got sick.

I feel getting worse.
>> I feel like it's getting worse.

But I want to keep the company I am working with my coworkers. 
>> But I want to keep the company that I am working in with my co-workers.

I will try to teach students with another subjects. Who said about turning a crisis into an opportunity!
>> I will try to teach students with other subjects.

 Who said about turning a crisis into an opportunity!
>> Talk about turning a crisis into an opportunity!

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