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In January, I'm just resting and playing.
Usually every month my schedule is changing.
And I have a many kind of job but now, I don't have a work now.
When I do not working, I'm very nervous.
These day, a lot of cases covid19 virus and do not come out to audition.
And just waiting, I think I should found other job.
I don't want to rest like zombie at home:(
This year, I will be have a lot of work please!

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Hi Ann:) 

That's okay. With you talents, you can find a job very easily. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In January, I'm just resting and playing.
>> This January, I will just rest and play. 

Usually every month my schedule is changing.
>> Usually my schedule changes every month. 

And I have a many kind of job but now, I don't have a work now.
>> And I have many kinds of jobs but now, I don't have any. 

When I do not working, I'm very nervous.
>> I get nervous when I don't work. 

These day, a lot of cases covid19 virus and do not come out to audition.
>> There are a lot of COVID-19 viruses these days so I  can't go on auditions. 

And just waiting, I think I should found other job.
>> I should just wait and find another kind of job. 

I don't want to rest like zombie at home:(
>> CORRECT

This year, I will be have a lot of work please!
>> I am looking forward to have a lot of jobs this year, please. 
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