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Prologue


I was going my school. Then I heard animal sound. I found a little cat! It¡¯s very small and looks like weak.
And my story is start.

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Hi Anne:) 

Congratulations on answering your first homework!  That's a very interesting prologue. 

PS: I need your answers to be related with the question I wrote down on the evaluation page. ^^ You still  did great though. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I was going my school. 
>> I was on my way to school and then I heard an animal.

Then I heard animal sound. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

I found a little cat! 
>> CORRECT

It¡¯s very small and looks like weak.
>> It¡¯s very small and looked weak.

And my story is start.
>> That is where my story started. 
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