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Why people say \"there is no place like home\"

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I think the reason why people say like that is that there are their loving things such as family, environment, their own private room in their home. So they can relax and feel safe and comfortable at their own home.
Furthermore there are no place like home like heaven after finishing work.

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Hello, John! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

I think the reason why people say like that is that there are their loving things such as family, environment, their own private room in their home. 
>> I think the reason why people say it is because the things they love are at home such as family, the environment, and their own private rooms or personal space.

So they can relax and feel safe and comfortable at their own home.
>> So, they can relax, feel safe and comfortable at their own home.

Furthermore there are no place like home like heaven after finishing work.
>> Furthermore, there is no place like home it's like heaven after finishing work.
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