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If I can invent anything, I should make teleporting merchine.
I think the most tiresome thing is moving to another place to place.
When I prepare go to outside, I should spend my time 1hour.
Take a shower, Make up, hair dry.....
Women are so tiresome, every women usually agree my opinion.

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Hi Ann:) 

Yes, this is true! We spend a lot of time to prepare ourselves for certain things. A teleporting machine can be very handy. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can invent anything, I should make teleporting merchine.
>> If I can invent anything, I will make a teleporting machine. 

I think the most tiresome thing is moving to another place to place.
>> I think the most tiresome thing is moving from one place to another. 

When I prepare go to outside, I should spend my time 1hour.
>> When I go outside, I should an hour of my time. 

Take a shower, Make up, hair dry.....
>> I should take a shower, do my make-up and dry my hair. 

Women are so tiresome, every women usually agree my opinion.
>> Women are tiresome and most is is agree on this opinion. 
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