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If you can invent something, what would it be?

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If I can invent something that I want, I want to invent something that is related with a new technique.
I think the best invention is something that is very useful to us, but I can invent it very easily.
So I want to invent something that is related with a new technique.
A new technique has a high possibility and most people don't know about it.
So if I can invent anything that I want, I want to invent something that is related with a new technique.

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Hi John:) 

I'm actually quite confused about the technique that you're saying. What technique do you mean? And what is it's function?

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can invent something that I want, I want to invent something that is related with a new technique.
>>If I can invent something that I want, I want to be something related to a new technique. 

I think the best invention is something that is very useful to us, but I can invent it very easily.
>>I think the best invention is something that is very useful to us, but I can't invent it very easily.

So I want to invent something that is related with a new technique.
>> CORRECT

A new technique has a high possibility and most people don't know about it.
>>A new technique has a high possibility of doing great things and most people don't know about it.

So if I can invent anything that I want, I want to invent something that is related with a new technique.
>>So if I can invent something that I want, I want to be something related to a new technique. 




























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