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What is your favorite Korean traditional game? Explain how this game is played.

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My favorite Korean traditional game is tug-of-war because it is push and pull game. So, I can feel the thrill. But if I don't focus on the game, the possibility which my team win will be unlikely so, I have to concentrate on it. Another reason which I like is It is easy to play the game. Firstly, you have to wear gloves to protect your hands. Secondly, you should stand by the rope. Thirdly, you should hold the rope. Finally, you should pull it. It is a game which many people can play and enjoy together.

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Hi Kimberly:) 

I've seen that game before. It was one of the games in the movie, "Squid Game". It's very interesting I must say. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My favorite Korean traditional game is tug-of-war because it is push and pull game. 
>>My favorite Korean traditional game is tug-of-war because it is a push and pull game. 

So, I can feel the thrill. 
>> I can usually the thrill through this game. 

But if I don't focus on the game, the possibility which my team win will be unlikely so, I have to concentrate on it. 
>> CORRECT

Another reason which I like is It is easy to play the game. 
>> Another reason why I like it is because it is easy to play. 

Firstly, you have to wear gloves to protect your hands. 
>> CORRECT

Secondly, you should stand by the rope. 
>> Second, you have to stand by the rope. 

Thirdly, you should hold the rope.
>> Third, you should hold the rope. 

Finally, you should pull it. 
>> CORRECT

It is a game which many people can play and enjoy together
>> It is a game where  many people can play and enjoy it together.























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