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ESSAY: Some people think products should be designed to last for long and some people think they sho

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ESSAY: Some people think products should be designed to last for long and some people think they should be designed to be cheap. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

I understand both side opinions. Some people who focus on the point for durability are practical. There is no need to change many time, using 1 product. It is a way saving money and time when searching new one.
On the other hand, the other side people think that the priority is money. It sounds very light but all products is getting old. So someday, it have to be changed. So those people consider cheap one.
As a result, I am the person who prefer to buy cheap products. It depends on what kind of product it is, but I could save my money and I think although it is the cheapest and poorest among products with difference price, I will be satisfied if it has the function I need.

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Hi there Luel! Thanks for doing your homework! Thanks for the active conversation as well. Enjoy your weekend! ^^ See you next week!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I understand both side opinions.
>>> I understand both sides.
>>> I understand both opinions.
Some people who focused on the point for durability are practical. 
>>> CORRECT
There is no need to change many time, using 1 product. 
>>> There is no need to change a product many times. 
It is a way saving money and time when searching new one.
>>> It is a way to save money and time when searching a new one.
On the other hand, the other side people think that the priority is money.
>>> On the other hand,  other people prioritize money.
 It sounds very light but all products is getting older.
 >>> CORRECT
 So someday, it have to be changed.
>>>  So someday, it has to be changed.
 So those people consider cheap one.
>>>  So those people consider cheap products.
As a result, I am the person who prefer to buy cheap products.
 >>> CORRECT
 It depends on what kind of product it is, but I could save my money and I think although it is the cheapest and poorest among products with difference price, I will be satisfied if it has the function I need.
>>>  It depends on what kind of product it is, but I could save my money and I think although it is the cheapest and poorest among products with different price. I will be satisfied if it has the function I need.
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