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In my case, first way is putting the earphones and listened to 'Faded'. It's one of the most famous pop songs, but it brings me peace to me. According to my experience(?), in very loud place I can't listen to musics like classic. In the case of Faded, it is proper loud, but it brings me peace. I think this song makes me in the stopped time. I recommend this song to you when you want to in the stopped time in the loud place. Second way is thinking and feeling the happiest moment in your life. And close your eyes. When I do it, I think I'm in stopped time, too. In addition, I can raise self-esteem, and think me that I have lots of good memories. It is just based on my experience, so finding your own way is better thing.

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Hello, Daniel! Thank you for answering your homework. Please take note of the corrections.


- Teacher Debbie

Homework:  How do you find peace and quiet in a loud area?

According to my experience(?), in very loud place I can't listen to musics like classic. 
>> In my experience, I couldn't listen loudly to music, like classical music, when I was in a noisy place.  

In my case, first way is putting the earphones and listened to 'Faded'. 
>> Therefore, when I'm in a loud place, first, I wear my earphones and listen to "Faded."

It's one of the most famous pop songs, but it brings me peace to me.
>> It's one of the most famous pop songs, but it brings me peace.

In the case of Faded, it is proper loud, but it brings me peace. 
>> It is quite loud, but it calms me.

I think this song makes me in the stopped time.
>> I think this song freezes time.

 I recommend this song to you when you want to in the stopped time in the loud place. 
>>  I recommend you listen to this song when you want to freeze time while in a loud place.

Second way is thinking and feeling the happiest moment in your life. And close your eyes. 
>> Second, I think about the happiest moment in my life and close my eyes.

When I do it, I think I'm in stopped time, too. 
>> When I do these, I think time stops, too.

In addition, I can raise self-esteem, and think me that I have lots of good memories.
>> In addition, I feel more confident whenever I think of lots of good memories.

It is just based on my experience, so finding your own way is better thing.
>> These are based on my experience, so finding your own way to find peace and quiet is better.
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