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I don't have any idea about that topic's knowledge.
Sometimes when I walked the street I saw the homeless people often.
And the season becomeing the winter I'm very worried about them.
Every homeless people have a sad story and hard reason to be a homeless.
But the goverment give it to help homeless using taxes, it's not good to way.
I think it's almost not good idea but in my personal opinion, government give it to help find them work and job.

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Hi Ann:) 

This is a good idea. Maybe this can be a great impact for them to get back on their feet and make their lives better. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't have any idea about that topic's knowledge.
>>I don't have any idea about that topic. 

Sometimes when I walked the street I saw the homeless people often.
>> Sometimes when I walk on the streets, I see homeless people often. 

And the season becomeing the winter I'm very worried about them.
>> Since it is winter, I am very worries about them. 

Every homeless people have a sad story and hard reason to be a homeless.
>> Every homeless people have a sad story and hard reason why they are homeless. 

But the goverment give it to help homeless using taxes, it's not good to way.
>> But the government give help to homeless people using taxes which is not a good thing. 

I think it's almost not good idea but in my personal opinion, government give it to help find them work and job
>> I think it's almost not a good idea. But in my personal opinion, the government should help them find jobs. 
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