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If you can live in another city in South Korea, which one will you pick and why?

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Of course I want to live in Seoul.
I am living in the city which is beside on Seoul, so it is comfortable to live but not perfectly.
But I expect that if I go to Seoul, if can be a perfect life for me.
My parents said that a country side is more comfortable than living in city, but I don't think like that.
Because I am born in the city and also I am more comfortable at the city.
I can enjoy a lot of entertainments and also there are a lot of new techniques.
So if I can live in another city in South Korea, I want to live in Seoul.

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Hi John:) 

That's true. Seoul is the place to be since it is the capital of South Korea. Everything that you can think of is already there which makes it so convenient. Good choice!

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Of course I want to live in Seoul.
>> CORRECT

I am living in the city which is beside on Seoul, so it is comfortable to live but not perfectly.
>> I am living a the city which is beside Seoul, so it is comfortable to live here. Although, it is not perfect. 

But I expect that if I go to Seoul, if can be a perfect life for me.
But I expect that if I go to Seoul, it will be a perfect life for me. 

My parents said that a country side is more comfortable than living in city, but I don't think like that.
>> My parents said that a country side is more comfortable than living in city, but I don't think so. 

Because I am born in the city and also I am more comfortable at the city.
>> It is because  I am born in the city that's why I am more comfortable here. 

I can enjoy a lot of entertainments and also there are a lot of new techniques.
>>I can enjoy a lot of entertainments and there are a lot of new technologies.

So if I can live in another city in South Korea, I want to live in Seoul.
>> So if I can live in another city in South Korea, it would be in Seoul. 

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