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If you can live in another city in South Korea, which one will you pick and why?

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If I can live in another city, I wish to live in Europe or U.S.A. So I wouldn't learn English. Because of one's native language.

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Hi Hyeon:) 

Great pick! You will enjoy there for sure. 

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If I can live in another city, I wish to live in Europe or U.S.A. 
>> If I can live in another city, I wish to live in a city in Europe or U.S.A.

So I wouldn't learn English. Because of one's native language.
>> This is because I don't need to learn how to speak in English more since it's there native language there. 

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