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If you could take a vacation anywhere in the world for any length of time, where would you go?

>>> I want to go to London where I went for the honeymoon fo 14days,in November, in 2016. My wife and I had a great time there, excepting for the fact that I lost my mobile phone in downtown.T.T When we got back home. On the way home, in the airplain, we promised to each other that we would go back London and stay where we had stayed with our future baby.
After this Covid pandamic, we would definitely go!

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Hi, U Seung! 

Oh, that is a nice idea and a nice place to stay. I hope you can go back there soon when this pandemic is totally over. 

Thank you for sharing! :)

~T. Roanne ^_^

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I want to go to London where I went for the honeymoon fo 14days,in November, in 2016. 
>> I want to go to London where I went for the honeymoon for 14 days, in November 2016. 
My wife and I had a great time there, excepting for the fact that I lost my mobile phone in downtown.T.T When we got back home. 
>> My wife and I had a great time there, except for the fact that I lost my mobile phone in the downtown when we got back home. 
On the way home, in the airplain, we promised to each other that we would go back London and stay where we had stayed with our future baby.
>> On the way home, in the airplane, we promised to each other that we would go back to London and stay where we had stayed with our future baby.
After this Covid pandamic, we would definitely go!
>> After this COVID pandemic, we would definitely go!
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