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It is not hard to see homeless people in these days. Some of them put off to live better already. However some of them make effort tolice better.I think government should support them.

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Hi Alex :)

This is a good idea. Maybe this can be a great impact for them to get back on their feet and make their lives better. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soou soon

It is not hard to see homeless people in these days.
>> CORRECT

 Some of them put off to live better already. 
>>CORRECT

However some of them make effort tolice better.
>> Fortunately, some of them make an effort to live better

I think government should support them.
>> I think the government should support them.

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