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Do you think learning how to play an instrument is important? Why or why not?

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No, I don't. If your dream is becoming instrumental player, it will be good to learn how to play an instrument but, if it is not, I think focusing on your major is more important than learning how to play an instrument. And, I think if learning how to play an instrument is not your own choice, clearly, you will not be able to focus on learning it. If you are a elementary school student, instead of learning it, learn simple concepts like notes. It is much better because you will have to play an instrument in school. If you learn about the notes exactly, clearly, you will be good at playing an instrument in the middle school.

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Hi Kimberly :) 

Every point in your answer is true. We should focus on the thing we want to be n the future. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

No, I don't. 
>> CORRECT

If your dream is becoming instrumental player, it will be good to learn how to play an instrument but, if it is not, I think focusing on your major is more important than learning how to play an instrument. 
>> If your dream is to become a professional musician, it will be good to learn how to play an instrument. But if not, I think focusing on your major is more important than learning how to play an instrument. 

And, I think if learning how to play an instrument is not your own choice, clearly, you will not be able to focus on learning it. 
>>And I think if we force ourselves to learn how to play an instrument, we will not be able to focus on learning it. 

If you are a elementary school student, instead of learning it, learn simple concepts like notes. 
>> CORRECT

It is much better because you will have to play an instrument in school. 
>> CORRECT

If you learn about the notes exactly, clearly, you will be good at playing an instrument in the middle school.
>> If you learn about notes, you will be good at playing an instrument in middle school.

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