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HOMEWORK:
Kindly answer the following in essay form.
Do you think learning how to play an instrument is important? Why or why not?

I think learning how to play an instrument is good, but it's not important to me. I had learned to play a guitar 7 years ago, but I can't play a guitar now. Because I didn't have much time to practice the guitar. It means that doing other things is more important than playing the guitar in my life. If someone is in this case, I don't recommend them to learn an instrument.

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Hi Won:) 

Yes, that's true. If you want to pursue a career that is inclined with instruments, maybe it can be important. But if not, then it is not important. 

Maybe it's not too late. You can still learn how to play the guitar. Hihihi. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

I think learning how to play an instrument is good, but it's not important to me. 
>> CORRECT

I had learned to play a guitar 7 years ago, but I can't play a guitar now.
>> I had learned how to play the guitar 7 years ago, but can't play it now anymore.

 Because I didn't have much time to practice the guitar. 
>> It is because I didn't have that much time to practice regularly. 

It means that doing other things is more important than playing the guitar in my life. 
>> CORRECT

If someone is in this case, I don't recommend them to learn an instrument.
>> If someone is int he same position, I don't recommend them learning how to play an instrument. 
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