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Do you think learning how to play an instrument is important? Why or why not?

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For me, I think learning how to play an instrument is important.
Because my dream is a musician, and playing an instrument is very important to musicians.
I don't need to know how to play an instrument but it will be much helpful to me.
I can know the basic notes and tones, and also I can get a sense about creating the music works.
And also I can play an instrument in front of others so I can make them happy.
I can express a lot of emotions by playing an instrument.
So I think learning how to play an instrument is important to me.

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Hi John:) 

Yes, you are correct. If you want to pursue this kind of career then learning how to play an instrument can be beneficial for you. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

For me, I think learning how to play an instrument is important.
>> CORRECT

Because my dream is a musician, and playing an instrument is very important to musicians.
>> My dream is to become a  musician so playing an instrument is very important to me. 

I don't need to know how to play an instrument but it will be much helpful to me.
>> CORRECT

I can know the basic notes and tones, and also I can get a sense about creating the music works.
>> I can know the basic notes and tones, and also I can get a sense on creating the music.

And also I can play an instrument in front of others so I can make them happy.
>> CORRECT

I can express a lot of emotions by playing an instrument.
>> CORRECT

So I think learning how to play an instrument is important to me.
>> CORRECT
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