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If you could travel back in time, where would you go?

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(I don't know if I got it right.) If I can travel back in time, I will go the time which I can change my life because I want to change my life and I don't want to regret me of the past. I will travel back the time, I will do my best to do many tasks successfully. Like this, the advantage of traveling back is being able to change my life, but the disadvantage is also being able to change my life. So, if I travel back in time, I will feel scared. But I'm interested in this topic. Due to my interest, I will be able to enjoy it. Now, It is impossible, but clearly, a day which it is possible will come. I'm looking forward to the day.

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Hi Kimberly:) 

Our experiences are the ones that makes us the person we are right now. You shouldn't have any regrets because you are a great person right now. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

If I can travel back in time, I will go the time which I can change my life because I want to change my life and I don't want to regret me of the past. 
>> If I can travel back in time, I will go the time which I can reset my life so that I won't have any regrets.

I will travel back the time, I will do my best to do many tasks successfully. 
>> CORRECT

Like this, the advantage of traveling back is being able to change my life, but the disadvantage is also being able to change my life.
>> Like this, the advantage of traveling back is being able to change my life, but the disadvantage changing it as well. 

So, if I travel back in time, I will feel scared. 
>> So if I traveled back in time, I will feel scared. 

But I'm interested in this topic. 
>> CORRECT

Due to my interest, I will be able to enjoy it. 
>> CORRECT

Now, It is impossible, but clearly, a day which it is possible will come. 
>> Now, it is impossible but one day it might be. 

I'm looking forward to the day.
>> I am looking forward to that day. 
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