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Why I like the stars than the moon.

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I like stars than the moon.
That is because stars are very big than the moon.
My second reason is, stars are brighter than the moon.
My third reason is stars have a lot of kinds.
Finally, stars have unique names.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you for doing your homework.  Your reply is the perfect answer to the given question. 

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I like stars than the moon.
>> I like the stars more than the moon. 

That is because stars are very big than the moon.
>> That is because they are much bigger than the moon.

My second reason is, stars are brighter than the moon.
>> Moreover, they are brighter than the moon.

My third reason is stars have a lot of kinds. 
Finally, stars have unique names.
>> There are also many kinds of stars, and they have unique names.
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