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If you knew your friend\'s husband or wife was cheating on him/her, what would you do?

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I will let my friend know it without hesitation to stop things from getting worse than now because I think marriage should be based on trust on each other, and marriage can get back to normal despite some wanderings.

Couples could have a seven-year itch. And there are many ways for them to love each other as they loved. For example, many doctors advise that couples should try to make themselves more attractive to their spouse through getting in shape, having bobbies in common, or having more time to have a heart-to-heart talk.

If couples have kids, couples have to try harder to love each other. A happy family deserves your efforts, and a happy family makes you much happier.

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Hi, Steve! Thank you for doing your homework! Please take note of the corrections. 


- Debbie

I will let my friend know it without hesitation to stop things from getting worse than now because I think marriage should be based on trust on each other, and marriage can get back to normal despite some wanderings.
>> I would let my friend know about it without hesitation to stop things from getting worse because I think marriage can get back to normal despite some shortcomings.

Couples could have a seven-year itch. 
>> This is a good sentence.

And there are many ways for them to love each other as they loved.
>> However, there are many ways for them to love each other again.

For example, many doctors advise that couples should try to make themselves more attractive to their spouse through getting in shape, having bobbies in common, or having more time to have a heart-to-heart talk.
>> For example, many doctors advise couples to make themselves more attractive for their spouses by getting in shape, having the same hobbies, or having more time to have a heart-to-heart talk.

If couples have kids, couples have to try harder to love each other.
>> If couples have kids, they have to try harder to love each other.

 A happy family deserves your efforts, and a happy family makes you much happier.
>>  A happy family deserves efforts. Moreover, a happy family makes life much happier.
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