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How do you think can we encourage people to take the COVID-19 vaccine?

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I think the government should make an accurate law to rid many people's worries. Because I think due to side-effects, some people can't be vaccinated. And the government must not push people because it is their choice. Before the government listens and solve their worries, they must not push people. Their body is theirs. Instead of pushing them, the government and we should persuade them. If the government and we do our best, clearly, we will overcome this situation. (These are my personal thoughts.)

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Hi Kimberly:) 

Yes, this is actually a personal choice. So that government should think of a ways to persuade the people to get vaccinated. 

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I think the government should make an accurate law to rid many people's worries. 
>> I think the government should make an accurate law to get rid of people's worries. 

Because I think due to side-effects, some people can't be vaccinated. 
>> Because I think that due to the side effects, some people choose to not get vaccinated. 

And the government must not push people because it is their choice. 
>> The government must not push people because it is their choice. 

Before the government listens and solve their worries, they must not push people. 
>>Before the government listens and solve their worries, they must not push people. 

Their body is theirs. Instead of pushing them, the government and we should persuade them. 
>> They are the ones in control of their body. Instead of pushing them to do something, they should persuade them instead. 

If the government and we do our best, clearly, we will overcome this situation. 
>> If the government will do their best, we will overcome this situation. 


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