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Do you think learning how to play an instrument is important? Why or why not?

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I have to say that It's not important. It depends on whether people like to play an instrument or not. But I want to learn playing piano someday.

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Hi Hyeon:) 

Yes, you are correct. If you want to pursue this kind of career then learning how to play an instrument can be beneficial for you. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon


I have to say that It's not important. 
>> I have to say that it is not important. 

It depends on whether people like to play an instrument or not. 
>> CORRECT

But I want to learn playing piano someday.
>> But I want to learn how to play a piano someday. 

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