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Kindly answer the following in essay form.
How do you think can we encourage people to take the COVID-19 vaccine?

I think COVID-19 vaccine should be more effective. It is because there are many COVID-19 patients who are vaccinated. These examples of breakthrough infection are continually occurring now. So I can't believe COVID-19 vaccine's effects.
Also COVID-19 vaccine causes many side effects. Actually I experienced that after vaccinated booster shot, that's so painful to me. So I think that's why some people reject to get the vaccine. It is necessary to be better than now.

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Hi Won:) 

Yes, that is true. There are some side effects to it. I experienced it myself but I think the purpose of the vaccine now is to lessen the effects of the virus and not lead us to being hospitalized. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think COVID-19 vaccine should be more effective. 
>> I think COVID-19 vaccines should be more effective. 

It is because there are many COVID-19 patients who are vaccinated.
>> It is because there are still many COVID-19 patients who got infected even if they are already vaccinated. 

These examples of breakthrough infection are continually occurring now. 
>> CORRECT

So I can't believe COVID-19 vaccine's effects.
>> So, I don't believe that the vaccine is effective. 

Also COVID-19 vaccine causes many side effects. 
>> Also, the COVID-19 vaccine causes many side effects. 

Actually I experienced that after vaccinated booster shot, that's so painful to me. 
>> Actually, I experienced it when I got the booster shot. It was so painful for me. 

So I think that's why some people reject to get the vaccine. 
>> So I think that this is why a lot of people refuse to get the vaccine. 

It is necessary to be better than now.
>> CORRECT

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