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There's a lot of controversy over this news in Korea.
It's die of covid 19 vaccine.
One day, very healthy person suddenly dead.
Everyone don't know why healthy person's dead reason.
But a few days before dead person got the vaccine.
There are many cases of like this.
And I can't reccomend getting a vaccine.
Just it's for free I think everyone has a choice.

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Hi Ann:) 

I think you are correct at some point. We have our right to choose whether to have it or not but there would always be consequences. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

There's a lot of controversy over this news in Korea.
>> There's a lot of controversy over this news in South Korea.

It's die of covid 19 vaccine.
>> It is many people dying from the COVID-19 vaccine. 

One day, very healthy person suddenly dead.
>> One day, a very healthy person suddenly died because of it. 

Everyone don't know why healthy person's dead reason.
>> No one knows the reason why that person died. 

But a few days before dead person got the vaccine.
>> But a few days before, he got the vaccine. 

There are many cases of like this.
>> CORRECT

And I can't reccomend getting a vaccine.
>> That is why I don't recommend getting the vaccine. 

Just it's for free I think everyone has a choice.
>> It should just be a personal choice instead. 
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