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Do you think Interstella can come true?

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I want to know the movie named Interstella can come true. It didn't prove so I want to know the rate that it may come true. If Albert says the rate is high, then at least the movie is not useless to us. Because, Albert thought and studied a lot about time. He claimed that if we move faster than light, the time goes slowly. And he claimed gravity can change the time. So, I will ask him about theory of relativity to explain easier and about the gravity. In addition, I want to ask him about fourth dimension. I want to know how it looks and can people live in it.

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Hi, Daniel!  That's very smart of you! Please take note of the corrections to help you improve more.


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I want to know the movie named Interstella can come true.
>> I want to know if Interstellar travel could happen.

 It didn't prove so I want to know the rate that it may come true.
>> Scientists haven't proven it yet, so I want to know if it is highly probable.

 If Albert says the rate is high, then at least the movie is not useless to us.
>> If Albert said it was, then at least the movie would not be useless for us. 

 Because, Albert thought and studied a lot about time. 
>> Albert would know because he thought and studied a lot about time.

He claimed that if we move faster than light, the time goes slowly. 
>> He claimed that if we moved faster than light, time would pass slowly. 

And he claimed gravity can change the time.
>> Moreover, he claimed gravity could change time.

 So, I will ask him about theory of relativity to explain easier and about the gravity. 
>> Therefore, I would ask him about the theory of relativity and gravity.

In addition, I want to ask him about fourth dimension. 
>> In addition, I would want to ask him about the fourth dimension. 

I want to know how it looks and can people live in it.
>> I would want to know how it looks and could people live in it.
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